Comments on: Short Story: New York City Marathon

By: Bill

Bill — Mon, 10 Mar 2008 22:48:43 +0000

The thing that stood out most to me was the first-person internal dialog and observations as they slipped from Byron to Will to Calvin then back. As Will came to his personal conclusion to leave, he also left the cycle of first-person narration – it punctuated the fact of his decision and it made a hole where that character once was.

By: Tammy

Tammy — Mon, 03 Mar 2008 16:20:30 +0000

I liked it… its was a good read

By: Oz

Oz — Tue, 13 Nov 2007 15:58:52 +0000

I really liked this one. I think Mikey would relate a lot to what you said about NY.so would a lot of people.

By: Marcia

Marcia — Wed, 17 Oct 2007 21:39:57 +0000

Not my favorite and I have several of those. Maybe too “deep” for me?

By: Wahoo

Wahoo — Sat, 06 Oct 2007 06:59:00 +0000

Thank you for sharing!

By: Michele

Michele — Mon, 30 Jul 2007 13:53:56 +0000

I didn’t get into this one as much as the last one. I may need to reread it though b/c I think I missed out on some of the depth/background stories of the brothers. I guess I was in an action mood and this was a thinking story. I’ll give it another go later this week.

By: Laura

Laura — Thu, 26 Jul 2007 19:22:02 +0000

I can see why this one wiped you out. I started crying when the woman quit the race. All I can say is that you have completly captured what I spent many of my days during my 20′s as a young New Yorker feeling. And, also, what I spend many of my days now feeling. One part depressing, one part motivational. One good read…