Can’t believe I made my deadline.

The post below is the story for this week. Please do yourself a favor and open the post up, then click on the “Print This Post” line which will (hopefully) open the whole thing up in a printer friendly version. Then print it out. I, personally, think it’s a little crazy to try to read something as long as a short story on your computer.

I’ll be posting a more in depth recap sometime next week. I don’t know that I’ll do this often, but this story lends itself to a recap. I just wanted to give you some time to actually read it before I go trampling all over your thoughts with my observations.

If you see any typos (and there will, throughout the course of this project, be typos) please clue me in.



  1. What do we do now? I liked it. I felt is was reminiscent of a conversation I was not a part of.

    I don’t quite understand the conspiracy, though. The USSR? Russia? Private industry? And why is it still going when the cold war is over?

  2. Michele says:

    Really enjoyed this one – nice twist on the fluoride conspiracy rattling around in some people’s heads. Good start!

  3. I liked it, wanted to learn a lot more about Morzeny and his gang. Loved that he was not super 007 type bad guy. Didn’t need the life lesson, but that’s just my style. I also appreciate the subtle push towards the use of more waxed paper.

  4. joe green says:

    The story was enjoyable. My only comments are:

    1. You go into some detail about Morzeny’s marital thoughts but there is no closure. Also, you mention his wife by name (Joyce) which personalizes her. Thus the reader gets invested in her and wants to know the outcome but there is none. Perhaps the part about his marriage would work better if you never gave the wife a name and thus she was more abstract and thus the reader would not care except as background.

    2. I kept waiting for more of a punch line at the end of the story, but it just died with the two characters.

  5. i’ll try again. it’s been a while since i read it, so forgive any inaccuracies…

    perhaps i’m agreeing with michelle–i like my life lessons cleverly packaged into stories that are nothing more than enjoyable reading until you get to the end and you’re in tears, or two days later you find yourself cracking up, or something along those lines.

    for me the irony was the guy who had lived his life nobly, become a good, strong person, etc. cared about how he died–while the guy who spent his whole life covering up a conspiracy for a country that no longer existed was all about “the only thing that matters is how you live, not how you die” or whatever. what did he do with his life? he had a wife he apparently did not like and a job that consisted entirely of killing people. he did have a good friend, though, which was nice. i guess.

    my opinion it that it does matter how you die. saying that getting killed trying to do the right thing is the same as getting run over in the street just doesn’t jive for me. yes, you’re dead in both situations. but in the former, the injustice runs deeper. it’s not that the pain for those left behind is necessarily any worse (although maybe it is)–it’s more of a right/wrong, good/bad, something-i-can-accept/something-that-turns-my-world-upside-down thing. that came out much more selfish than i planned, but i guess in the end the real difference is the difference it has on the people left behind.

    i didn’t think the recap killed the magic. it focused on collateral things instead of the meaning of the story. it’s like a special feature on the DVD–not the deleted scenes (which are virtually always a let down), but the bloopers (which just portray the fun of making the movie).